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Death only brought us closer

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I sit here,
Helpless to you,
You lie there,
Unaware of me too.

You’ll never know,
That I was here,
Watching over you,
Sat calmly in fear.

I didn’t know,
What to say,
Or how to feel.
But there you lay.

Shadows passing,
Along the halls,
Knowing all along,
Things won’t be as before.

As far as we had drifted,
Through decisions made,
No longer came between us,
So there I sat and stayed.
Carpe Diem ...

...... Live everyday as if it was your last
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arachibutyrophobic's avatar
your comment (carpe diem) is almost like a subtitle or afterthought. have you read tuesdays with morrie? there's this part where the dying professor talks about a buddhist mentality about living as if there was a bird on your shoulder, and every morning asking this spirit is you'd be happy with your life if you died that day.

first person perspective very powerful in this case. i like the simplistic, helpless type of starting - very few words, just the very essence of the emotion - then moving on and developing into something less halting and more meaningful. maybe link the contents more to the title? or even the sub-title/afterthought?